Weekend Writing Warrior Excerpt – The Great Dragons
Woohoo! I’ve managed to get it together two weeks in a row. A personal best. So, how about a little setup? This excerpt comes from another writing challenge between my Dueling Librarian cohort Renee and I. This week I’m sharing a bit from my half of the mythology challenge. The Great Dragons attempts to create a classic creation myth in the style akin to Ovid, told as a bedtime story. I hope you enjoy!
The first to emerge from the fiery nest was Malik, a bright red dragon with fierce blue eyes. Seeing his parents spinning in a swirl of greens and blues, he flew to them. Soon to follow was a much smaller, orange dragon with a kind face and friendly eyes who called herself Savil. Seeing her brother near the bodies of their parents, she went to his side to grieve with him. She was followed Maric, Tulic, Galve, and hundreds more. Together they gathered around the bodies of Theric and Kahna, mourning the parents they would never know.
Their tears fell upon the great elder dragons, mixing with their father’s to fill the low areas to create the first oceans. Their wing beats birthed the four winds whose momentum began to move the pair towards the fireball nest where they fell into orbit, circling and circling without end.
Over time, Theric andKahna’s bodies became the earth. Their wings became the mountains ranges.
Thank you so much for participating in this week’s WeWriWa! If you would like to read the whole short, you can find it on my Wattpad page.
Really love the mythic feel of this piece!
Thank you Christina!
Cool–I love origins mythology! Nice job. 🙂
Thank you!
Interesting creation tale! I enjoyed the details…
Thanks Veronica. It’s sometimes hard to pick the right 8 to 10 sentences sometimes.
I can’t speak to how well you’ve captured Ovid’s style — I haven’t read anything of his since I was forced to, in the original Latin, back in high school — but this snippet has a grand mythical feel.
Thanks for the feedback and for stopping by Ed. I’ve only read Ovid in English, and in college at an English lit major. What I took away was his conversational style and attitude towards the gods. He didn’t portray them as deities who possessed any power over humans, therefore, he could be critical of their actions. He pointed out their flaws and made humans the victims. That was the essence I was trying to convey. Maybe that came through, may not.